"She saw without seeing" juxtaposed against "“I got tired of asking permission to exist,” he confided, looking at the seatback in front of him but with the cloudy gaze of remembering what he had escaped. “Down there, nobody cares who you were.”"
What a universal paradox - to be seen and unseen in the worst way possible.
A slow fever builds. The details are placed so carefully they slip past unnoticed. Each scene feels like a locked suitcase, and I sense nothing good waits inside. So far, Jaap, it’s greens diet only. Open the suitcase.
Beginning to feel stifling. Concrete bunker, coiled wire on wall and bar balconies. Once inside and metal sliding door closed; hope there is a code to be released.
Eery. Vannak is after his kidneys, my guess. Watched HUMINT on Netflix last night. Dark and magnificent Korean cinematography, choreography, love story, the human condition.
"She saw without seeing" juxtaposed against "“I got tired of asking permission to exist,” he confided, looking at the seatback in front of him but with the cloudy gaze of remembering what he had escaped. “Down there, nobody cares who you were.”"
What a universal paradox - to be seen and unseen in the worst way possible.
That's the compound in one sentence, the architecture of being used.
The drive was uncomfortable but now the alarms are blaring...
Great pacing and description.
Thanks, Bradley
A slow fever builds. The details are placed so carefully they slip past unnoticed. Each scene feels like a locked suitcase, and I sense nothing good waits inside. So far, Jaap, it’s greens diet only. Open the suitcase.
Nice! Chapter 4 is set up for the real bad guys to show up!!!
Ha! The real bad guys indeed, Shhh but don’t tell anyone :)
Beginning to feel stifling. Concrete bunker, coiled wire on wall and bar balconies. Once inside and metal sliding door closed; hope there is a code to be released.
Sliding closed.
The nuance in your prose is 🔥!
Thank you, Billy!
Comforting travel into what? Prison? Frightening
Wow, the cement skeleton skyscrapers suddenly leaned on me without of course bending!
Eery. Vannak is after his kidneys, my guess. Watched HUMINT on Netflix last night. Dark and magnificent Korean cinematography, choreography, love story, the human condition.
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